This "stylistic" paragraph is an excerpt from from an essay I wrote last year called "Escaping the Skinner Box" that was a response to another essay. The "plain" paragraph is something I came up with to show the dichotomy. (I know I kind of did the exercise backwards, but I tend to write stylistically all the time because its easier for me to think in figures and tropes rather than just a plain style)
Plain- The fact remains that within a system a profound talent can easily elevate his or herself. Without surprise the system is not meant to be easily analyzed it banks on protecting itself. The responsibility of the talented and creative population is large because they are the ones who can change the path for the masses. It is not hard to conceive why it is for this reason that many of the creative talent become apathetic towards his or her environment and the seemingly unchangeable system.
Stylistic- The point nevertheless, remains that within the rules of a system profound and monumental talent can elevate easily, presumably because he can see outside of the system, he can see possibilities that those who are so intertwined with the system are oblivious to. This is not surprising though, the system isn’t meant to be transparent, the system is made to be deceiving and self-preservatory. The load on the shoulders of the profound talent is gargantuan because with his gift of sight he can see the flaws of the system and knows that they are inevitably recurring and that it is not until all bridges over troubled water have been burned and forgotten can there be any hope of a new more humane, more civilized, and less deceiving system can dig root and evolve. Cue the apathy; it’s not hard to see why the heart of humanity, the talent chooses to, instead of fighting the losing battle of changing the unchangeable system, in quiet anger manipulating the system to thrive at the expense of it and its minions respectively out of the resentment to its injustices.
Thursday, April 8, 2010
chap 10 rhetorical act 2
This is an excerpt from a an essay I wrote for a scholarship like a month ago, that I recently found out I was chosen for, regardless, I think that I use figures and the occasional trope unconsciously more than I thought. I know that I use a lot of appositives, long participial phrases, parallelism, and other things I don't even remember the name of but that's because I had this crazy ap english teacher in high school who pounded us with ridiculous amounts syntax and for some reason where none of the math stuck grammar just kind of did.
The question for the essay went something like: “What are your aspirations and goals?” These were some of my ideas I brainstormed before I wrote the paragraph and used some figures.
I want to learn and I am grateful for the opportunity I have to study at as diverse university as Colorado State University Pueblo.
The General Public does not have equal access to the law that the wealthy do.
With this knowledge and a college education I would serve pueblo by providing equal access to legal representation regardless of financial circumstances.
Paragraph:
In the next five years I see myself continuing my education. I want to learn; I am grateful for the opportunity I have now to study at such a diverse University as Colorado State University-Pueblo and would not trade it. However, I have long dreamed of attending Law school. Along with the world class education and critical thinking skills acquired in law school, much of my motivation to strive to attend law school resides in my basic feelings about the correlation between education and freedom. The General Public does not have equal access to the law that the wealthy do, we all know this. Through education an individual gains freedom. Freedom is the ability to identify and help change the injustices in a society. Therefore I believe that in today’s society there are few things that symbolize freedom on a more intimate level that having an extensive knowledge of the law. Motivated by this foundation and armed with a law school degree I would serve Pueblo by providing quality equal access to legal representation regardless of financial circumstances.
The question for the essay went something like: “What are your aspirations and goals?” These were some of my ideas I brainstormed before I wrote the paragraph and used some figures.
I want to learn and I am grateful for the opportunity I have to study at as diverse university as Colorado State University Pueblo.
The General Public does not have equal access to the law that the wealthy do.
With this knowledge and a college education I would serve pueblo by providing equal access to legal representation regardless of financial circumstances.
Paragraph:
In the next five years I see myself continuing my education. I want to learn; I am grateful for the opportunity I have now to study at such a diverse University as Colorado State University-Pueblo and would not trade it. However, I have long dreamed of attending Law school. Along with the world class education and critical thinking skills acquired in law school, much of my motivation to strive to attend law school resides in my basic feelings about the correlation between education and freedom. The General Public does not have equal access to the law that the wealthy do, we all know this. Through education an individual gains freedom. Freedom is the ability to identify and help change the injustices in a society. Therefore I believe that in today’s society there are few things that symbolize freedom on a more intimate level that having an extensive knowledge of the law. Motivated by this foundation and armed with a law school degree I would serve Pueblo by providing quality equal access to legal representation regardless of financial circumstances.
Thursday, April 1, 2010
rhet act 1 chap 9
Exordium- The future, not the past, dictates the present.
Narration- The sense of time, Kairos that the Ancient Greeks articulated not solely with regard to identifying the right opportunity to speak symbolized a unique sense of time completely independent of chronos. Chronos, the perception of time in which the “present,” the conception of now, directs sensory perception to only a biological being’s current position in space and time muting the senses to consciousness of the “past,” what happened a second ago, and the “future,” what will happen a second from now. Kairos on the other hand…
Partition- In a purely physical world where the biological variable is eliminated from the equation, quantum mechanics, the art of measuring, quantitatively, the action of subatomic particles, finds itself innately entangled with a highly complex conception of the time dimension referred to by the Ancient Greeks as Kairos.
Peroration- Perception of the present is efficient for humans in an evolutionary sense. Throughout the biological evolution of man one would expect that our Chrono-conception of time as opposed to a kairotic sense of time benefited the species greatly and has been inherently important to the survival and thriving of the species, through group hunting and gathering, and, in the development of agriculture, industry, and technology. The trend that has appeared is that man is at a faster and faster fate reaching these pinnacles of evolution. Take for example the number of years between the evolution from hunting and gathering to agriculture versus the rate of evolution observed in the short time between the industrial revolution and the successful firing of the Large Hadron Particle Collider in Geneva (that happened Tuesday by the way). Man is evolving at a faster and faster rate due to the immense speed and copia of information available. Therefore once evolution reaches a point where it is physically measured instantaneously the human conception of time will evolve along with it to an overall encompassing perception of the past present and future, kairos.
Narration- The sense of time, Kairos that the Ancient Greeks articulated not solely with regard to identifying the right opportunity to speak symbolized a unique sense of time completely independent of chronos. Chronos, the perception of time in which the “present,” the conception of now, directs sensory perception to only a biological being’s current position in space and time muting the senses to consciousness of the “past,” what happened a second ago, and the “future,” what will happen a second from now. Kairos on the other hand…
Partition- In a purely physical world where the biological variable is eliminated from the equation, quantum mechanics, the art of measuring, quantitatively, the action of subatomic particles, finds itself innately entangled with a highly complex conception of the time dimension referred to by the Ancient Greeks as Kairos.
Peroration- Perception of the present is efficient for humans in an evolutionary sense. Throughout the biological evolution of man one would expect that our Chrono-conception of time as opposed to a kairotic sense of time benefited the species greatly and has been inherently important to the survival and thriving of the species, through group hunting and gathering, and, in the development of agriculture, industry, and technology. The trend that has appeared is that man is at a faster and faster fate reaching these pinnacles of evolution. Take for example the number of years between the evolution from hunting and gathering to agriculture versus the rate of evolution observed in the short time between the industrial revolution and the successful firing of the Large Hadron Particle Collider in Geneva (that happened Tuesday by the way). Man is evolving at a faster and faster rate due to the immense speed and copia of information available. Therefore once evolution reaches a point where it is physically measured instantaneously the human conception of time will evolve along with it to an overall encompassing perception of the past present and future, kairos.
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